Ideas on how to word my gift registry card?

Question

First off please no comments on etiquette regarding sending out wedding registry cards, I know our families will not be offended and rather will be happy they don't have to call and ask someone.

Im having trouble with the wording/rhyming

These are the two versions i have come up with that i just cant seem to get right

To celebrate our wedding you may wish to buy us presents
However this is not required, all we require is your presence
If you insist, we have a list at Target we have put together
Although we must admit money would better
So we can pick and choose what our apartment can use

or

To celebrate our wedding you may wish to buy us presents
However this is not required, all we require is your presence
If you insist, we have a list at Target we have put together
Although we must admit money would great
So we can pick and choose what our apartment can accommodate

Does anyone have any suggestion on how to tweak these to make it come out right?

Answer 1

Aside from the other issues, you don't "require" their presence. You request their presence.

Answer 2

So much for class. An RSVP should be a card and envelope with pay as you go postage. I have obvious couples simply comprise a website for the visitor to RSVP on, however I think that may be a little cheesy. Citing gifts (or the dearth their of) is particularly cheesy. There must be no mention of items, registries, or whatever else of that subject on the invitation. Money bar's are also highly cheesy. I know in some ingredients of the sector they are applicable, but the U.S. Just isn't one of those areas. A money bar is like inviting persons to your residence for dinner after which anticipating them to pay for his or her wine. You do not ask your company to support pay on your wedding.

Answer 3

Than you Me! That was great!



Dear, you are having trouble with the wording because it is not polite to send a registry card in a wedding invitation. At least not in the USA. And I hope your friends and relatives all send you a dish towel!

I can not believe you would actually put into writing that you want to pick and choose gifts for your wedding! Rude, so rude, you had to have made this up. This question, worded similarly to this one, has been here before Troll alert! Troll!



Here is another poem for our enjoyment. Entitled: "the wedding we can't afford".



Our wedding it is almost here

it is time to send the money

we can't afford this reception now .

Your money we will need.



We'd just as soon you don't come

Catered food it is expensive

and leave your rug-rats at home too

we won't be feeding them, either



We are picky with the gifts,

we would as soon you send us money

Our apartment is so tiny

No Forman Grill for us



We picked the high class Target

Because we are so cool.

No Walmart for our registry

If you want that, you're a fool



To celebrate our wedding

you may wish to buy us presents

Just put the money in a card, and

skip the wrapping paper.



Our wedding costs a fortune

the cake and venue too

my dress is a designer one

Mick Jagger provides our music



Our honeymoon lasts 4 weeks,

the travel to Fiji's not cheap

call the travel agent soon

and ask for our travel registry



You might think I am a spoiled brat,

used to getting her way

a control freak who must have things

just her own way



I have not time to unwrap things,

it is a big bore anyway

I can not take the time to return

all the presents I do not choose



this invite and the poem are special

se, they are just for you

do not expect a "thank you" note

This poem is all you're getting!



thanks to my grade school, high school and college literature teachers, I'm sure Mrs. Weiss will give me an "A" on this poem, just like she did on my World Lit II thesis on "Anna Karenina" LOL, not!



And dear, before you comment about how mean "Me" and "Rivers" are, take a look at what you wrote, and know that you are either mean yourself, or a troll..

Answer 4

I know most stores are giving out registry cards to include in invitations. Realize this is a marketing maneuver and not really a change in what is acceptable in terms of human decency. Without getting into it with you about whether you should do a registry card at all, I don't understand, having included one, why you need a poem. If you're registered at Target, just say that. If you wanted to pick and choose things for your apartment, you should choose them at Target, and then your guests who choose to use the registry will buy you what you want.



ETA: I don't leave critical advice on posts like this to be snarky. I'm genuinely concerned that begging for money will hurt the bride and groom socially and possibly professionally, just because it shows such questionable judgment. I can about guarantee you that some of your guests will care, even if they're polite enough to keep it to themselves. It will come out in little ways in your future relationship.

Answer 5

Sheesh. I will never understand the crabby, bossy, better-than-you-because-I think-I-know-etiquette women on here. Guys would NEVER be that snarky and mean. You wonder why men rule the world? Who wants to live with women like that? They can't even answer the question/do the job because they're too busy being nasty.



Just use the pre-printed cards and leave it at that. If you really want the money (and who doesn't?) just leave all poems and cards out and you will get money.

Answer 6

Here's a start....



Please don't think we are wacky

We know we are quite tacky

But I'm am going to marry my honey

as a gift we want your money



If you want to wrap a gift

to Target get a lift

we have picked that store

so you can give us more



On our wedding day

You, our guest, shall pay

Guests should have the funds I think

To pay for every drink



We can't wait to make the leap

And weddings are not cheap

We need your cash real soon

To cover our honeymoon

Answer 7

WOW - you're lucky I'm not in your family..